We’re well into Fall semester now and I’m helping to lead a class called Natural Science Research Methods. The goal of the class is to help new Masters students in the School of Forestry propose and plan their two-year thesis project. It’s exciting hearing about all of the cool research ideas these students are wrestling with.
This week, the students are to start thinking about the introductions for their proposals. They need to develop concise research questions, a good hook and a sense of the scope and broader impacts of their projects. These are tricky skills to learn, so we decided to organize a hands-on activity to give them some practical experience. Now, analyzing well-written proposals is informative but also can be daunting; especially at the early stage of proposals it’s hard to find a lot of comparisons between your drafts and well-polished writing. We decided to go the opposite route and give them poorly written proposals that they’d then work together to critique and improve.
Anyone out there have a poorly written proposal they’d like to have 25 eager and intelligent students tear apart?
Yeah, we didn’t have a lot of volunteers either, so I decided to craft several absolutely abysmal proposals from scratch. Now it’s not hard to write poorly but it turns out it takes a bit of work to break every rule in the book. Writing these lousy proposals ended up giving me a good chance to think about my own science writing. The process of analyzing a paragraph to make sure it does everything wrong isn’t too different from analyzing a different sentence to make sure it does everything right.
Instead of posting rules for excellent proposal writing, here are my suggestions for how to write outrageously bad research proposals. Give it a try, it might even give you a few insights about your own writing style.
Rules for bad research proposal writing: (in no particular order)
1) Fill your proposal with technical language (it makes you seem smarter)
2) Make sure your proposal’s argument is exceedingly complicated (only smart people should be able to follow your logic after all!)
3) Delight in irrelevant examples
4) Never provide any kind of synthesis (it should be self-evident, right?)
5) Be overly vague or overly specific or both, overly.
6) Clearly imagine your audience, then write your proposal for someone else.
7) Never contextualize your research
8) Humility does not win money – overstate your broader impacts with abandon.
9) Make sure your title either grabs the reader’s attention (exclamation points help) or summarizes the entire project.
10) Use third person perspective in detailing your research so as not to appear self-centered with all those “I”‘s (or use the second person to really grab the readers’ attention)
11) Cite a lot (I’m standing on the shoulders of [an army of] giants!) or not at all (Who needs giants anyway?)
12) Don’t define A.C.R.O.N.Y.M.S
13) Propose research with serious moral/ethical concerns (Science ain’t for sissies!)
14) Propose research that cannot feasibly be accomplished (‘Because you might be the one who can finally do it’)
15) Don’t proofread (If stats can have margins of error so can your spelling)
Add additional rules to the comments. I’d love to hear what you come up with to add to this list!
Oh, and here are a couple of really, unbelievably bad (home-grown) research proposals. Enjoy.
How to mitigate climate change!
Climate change is all around us: raising our sea levels, drying our plains, inducing fires in our forests, parching our deserts, melting our ice caps, spreading invasive species, causing extinctions, and affecting the biodiversity of our natural areas! My research will be focusing on ways to mitigate these changes due to climate change to preserve the health of the world.
The forecasting model that I am proposing will create a very detailed map of the world’s most extremely threatened ecosystems by climate change, overlaid with degrees of risk assessment based upon the IPCC’s most current data. This model can be used by policy makers and citizens to forecast what will be happenening to them in their neighborhoods due to climate change. I will make my climate change model on the computer. It will need information like location, state, country, temperature, number of cars (and other greenhouse gas causing things), how deep the water is (if it’s the ocean part of the model), how close the nearest forest is (if it’s the land part of the model because trees eat carbon dioxide), and IPCC data. I have most of the information already except for some of it and the reason for this proposal is to get money to help me collect the rest of the model information so I can make the model to predict climate change’s effects in peoples’ neighborhoods.
Climate change is caused because of greenhouse gasses. During the Industrial Revolution and really any time after 1600 A.D., coal was burned in factories and trains and boats and that led to an increase in carbon dioxide, one of the greenhouse gasses, into the atmosphere. Now because we have cars (and cars weren’t invented back then) the situation is worse. All that carbon dioxide in the atmosphere traps the heat from the sun on the earth like a greenhouse, hence the name “greenhouse effect.” People use to call climate change “global warming” but that’s wrong because even though the globe is getting warmer due to the greenhouse effect some places are actually getting colder sometimes which is what my model is going to predict.
Other scientists have tried to predict the effects of climate change in the future but they’ve failed, in part because they can’t agree how much climate change is going to happen which makes skeptics think that climate change isn’t real. Climate change is real though. My model will be different than all the others and will be more accurate though because I am taking into account atmospheric conditions, oceanic conditions and terrestrial conditions in a new way that is novel. This exhilarating contribution will help policy makers and citizens to forecast what will be happening to them right in their own backyards and will help people make National Parks to stop the loss of biodiversity in our natural places.
Human-Animal Conflicts in Kenya
You’re walking through the forest in northern India. You’re all alone, except for your goats.You just want to get your goats to market so you can sell them and get food for your family. You have 7 children and they are hungry. All of a sudden a tiger leaps out at you! You try to defend the goats but it’s too late, the tiger has eaten one of your goats and killed two others. That means less food for you and your family this week.
Many people have been living this story all over the world. Human-wildlife conflict is rampant and a critical part of the everyday lives of millions of people living in developing countries (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000b). This proposal is focused on human-wildlife conflict having grown up in Kenya. This research will be studying human-wildlife conflict in the savannas of Africa between humans and Lions (Panthera leo) and Leopards (Panthera pardus).
As the ecologists S. Smith and A.T. Smith and Anthropologist, J. Smith have related in numerous publications over the last decade and a quarter, cattle (Bos primigenius) in Kenya often fall prey to lions (Panthera leo) and Leopards (Panthera pardus) (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000b, 2002, 2003, 2004a, 2004b, 2004c, 2005). This has been a problem because people rely on cattle (Bos primigenius) for their livelihoods (Smith et al. 1999, 2000b, 2002, 2003, 2004c, 2005). The cattle (Bos primigenius) that have been killed by wildlife can no longer be sold and so cease to have value (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000b). This is unfortunate because the majority of people (Homo sapien sapien) living in this region are living on only about $15 a week (Smith et al. 2004c, 2005) and a single head of cattle represents a $300 investment (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000b, 2002).
This proposal proposes a survey of people who live in this area to see how their lives are affected by wildlife. This proposed research will conduct surveys in villages at [0°22’41.35” S, 36°42’04.22” E], [0°22’41.37” S, 36°42’04.23” E], [0°22’41.42” S, 36°42’04.52” E], [0°22’41.12” S, 36°42’04.97” E], [0°22’41.40” S, 36°42’04.56” E]. I would be speaking Swahili so the surveys would be in the local language and so will be more robust (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000c].
This project will make a major contribution to this literature because despite the several publications by Smith et al. (Smith et al. 1999, 2000a, 2000b, 2002, 2003, 2004a, 2004b, 2004c, 2005) This research’s surveys will be a good additional look at the livelihoods of these pastoralists. This work will have significant broader impacts because there are pastoralists all over the world suffering due to human-wildlife impacts (Scott et al. 2004). Bringing attention to their concerns may have a significant impact on their livelihoods.
A holistic survey of global lizards in order to understand lizard diversity and the roles lizards play in the ecosystems and to help start a lizard museum
Lizards are the most important species on the planet and in this proposal I’m going to tell you why. Lizards are one of the most diverse species, other than plants, fishes, birds and insects, and they make important contributions to ecosystems all around the world. I will count the lizards in tropical areas to measure diversity and then extrapolate their important roles they have in those ecosystems.
It has been shown that lizards have a larger role in ecosystem processes than some other species (Omar et al. 2006, Shudder 2009, Raleigh 2011). The real story is far more complicated. When you get lots of different lizard species in the same place they eat different things and they go different places which spreads them out over the landscape (Omar and Sandy 2008).
In order to count and accurately study the lizards I will collect all of the lizards I can find in order to identify them right. Furthermore I will hire locals (to support local economics) to find and kill more lizards to bring them back to me to increase the breadth of my samples. They will be killed using proven methods (Samsung 1975) and stored in bottles for the museum my friend is starting. For every lizard I bring back I will get $0.55 which will help offset some of the costs of my research. I will also find someone to analyze what the lizards have eaten before I killed them in order to understand what the lizards eat in their ecosystem (an important feature of ecological role).
Other studies are egregiously narrow-sighted and stupid because they haven’t tried to get a holistic global perspective on these lizard communities. For example, Omar and Sandy (2008, 2009) only studied lizards in South America and Raleigh (and her lab group) only studied lizards in Australia (2000). This lack of perspective leads their conclusions to be totally inaccurate, as opposed to mine which will have a lot more data to support them.
The importance of this project is obvious. Without a holistic knowledge of global communities scientific knowledge will remain narrow-sighted.
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I am teaching a course for first-year college students that uses case studies to lead them through learning scientific principles and skills. We are currently about to start a proposal writing stage, and it would be excellent if I could use your examples to help them create their own criteria for writing /good/ propsals. Would you mind if I used your work as inception material for an in-class discussion? I’m in the chemistry department at UMass Amherst.
soooooo funny, thank you SO much. I’m studying epidemiology and am showing this to my peers for fun today!